Here is another helpful post from Dan Alatorre’s blog on the topic of writing emotions.
Using my unreleased manuscript An Angel On Her Shoulder, I am showing you my techniques for reworking a story into a more readable, more enjoyable piece. It’s 45+ lessons in about 45 days. (To start at Chapter 1, click HERE.)
To view it best, bring up the two versions in different windows and view them side by side to see what was changed.
Then give me your thoughts in the comment section.
In this chapter what I want you to do is open two windows and look at each paragraph side by side. Look at the original version, with its few emotions, and how it reads. Then look at the words and phrases I added in the Final version and get its feel.
But first, just read the chapter – to enjoy the story. (We rearranged the opening paragraphs, so don’t get thrown by that.)
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