Here is another great post from Dan Alatorre on the topic of wrting a tension filled standoff.
Using my unreleased manuscript An Angel On Her Shoulder, I am showing you my techniques for reworking a story into a more readable, more enjoyable piece. It’s 45+ lessons in about 45 days. (To start at Chapter 1, click HERE.)
To view it best, bring up the two versions in different windows and view them side by side to see what was changed.
Then give me your thoughts in the comment section.
Okay, time for a showdown. Who does what, and how do you portray it?
Chapter 24, “FINAL”
I immediately regretted my decision.
I pulled up to the beer house, but the weather guy had been right. No rain. Barely even any wind. That drew the bar patrons out in force, and the street side parking was all taken. The side lot was full, too. I knew there would be plenty of open spaces…
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