An Angel On Her Shoulder, Chapter 2: an exercise in storycraft


Here is another great post from Dan Alatorre on the craft of writing

Dan Alatorre

Starting January 1, 2017, I am showing the process of changing a first draft into a finished book.

Using my manuscript An Angel On Her Shoulder, we will see what gets kept, what gets cut, and how we roll out a story that immerses readers. Read chapter 1 HERE.

The reworked (“final”) version of the chapter appears first, followed by the original first draft. Open two windows and read them side by side to easily see the changes.

My analysis and explanation of the changes is as the bottom.


An Angel On Her Shoulder, Chapter 2

cover working cover – I don’t think it’s ominous enough

We would never have called it bullying.

Not back then, when Nixon stepped down as our president and plaid pants dominated the business fashion world. In Millersburg, Indiana, whining about being bullied would get the crap kicked out of you.

Some kids were…

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